Urban Posted December 15, 2005 started writing poems recently, a lot of the members here are so talented, its amazing. anyways please tell me what i need improve on... here's one i wrote some time ago but reworked on it recently: You are my angel when I’m Asleep Never left me alone when I was in Need You were my solace in my darkest Hours You eased my pains with your loving Powers Mama I dedicate my life for you, it’s True My mind, my spirit and soul, my heart Too You carried me nine months in your Womb I’ll appreciate that till the day I meet my Tomb Cause Nothing can ever equal your warm Affection I’ll always offer you my attention and Devotion You’re the best mother in the whole World I pray that you’re still here when I’m Old Promised we’d be there for each other, that’s a Pact You’ll always have my undying love, and that’s a Fact Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Gorgeous Posted December 27, 2005 Originally posted by xamar87weyne: Mama I dedicate my life for you, it’s True My mind, my spirit and soul, my heart Too Its very endearing and thoughtful for you to write a poem about your mother. I LOVED IT... but that was my favourite line.. I think your very talented abowe.. Keep up the good stuff.. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Arawella Posted December 28, 2005 Masha Allah walaal, you have beautifully penned how most of us feel about our mothers. If you do not mind, I really would like to forward your poem to my friends to use it to portray their love and adoration of their mothers whether it be when writing cards or simply just reading it to them. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Arawella Posted December 28, 2005 Masha Allah walaal, you have beautifully penned how most of us feel about our mothers. If you do not mind, I really would like to forward your poem to my friends to use it to portray their love and adoration of their mothers whether it be when writing cards or simply just reading it to them. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Allamagan Posted December 29, 2005 Nice poem! HOOYADU WAA LAMA HURAAN! wallaahi wax loo dhigaa malahan! am Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Urban Posted January 4, 2006 thanx for the reply ppl.. Originally posted by Fathia: If you do not mind, I really would like to forward your poem to my friends to use it to portray their love and adoration of their mothers whether it be when writing cards or simply just reading it to them. ^^lol please do! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ramla_cadey Posted January 5, 2006 nice poem! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
