Fly away...

[Modesty23]

Hey guys,

im new here and well im not much of a writer so my poem is a lil "needing of feed bacK"...here goes:

let me know wha u think ok!

 

Fly Away:

 

My only desire is to fly away

 

And let all my misery walk off astray.

 

Every hour of darkness I plead to God and thank Him gratefully

 

For although I’ve shed some tears, it’s not as terrible as it could be

 

But if truth must be told,

 

Then I must be bold

 

And tell you that even though my tears and pain

 

Will someday stop like the drops of rain

 

It’s hard not having a shoulder to cry on.

 

But naturally after each sunset comes the raise of dawn

 

And this broken heart of mine most learn to move on.

[Jafarel.]

WLC to SOL....u have 05 plate...

 

Criticising/praising are not my strongest tools..but ur poem isnt bad...Good luck mending that broken heart...( Isnt there a tyre repairer around ur area? I hear they do mending...not sure if hearts though..give them a try..)

[Sincere]

I like the optimism portrayed in the face of adversity.....nice poem, I enjoyed it.

[Modesty23]

Thanx guys for the feedback. Its my first poem and well i really am starting to like this poetry thing:)

salams